I´m (incomplete
verb)having a fantastic time!!! I´m in Tokio, it´s a county
of Japan. The weather is freezing. (this makes no sense: is it freezing or
boiling?).
The city is huge, there are a lot of buildings and billboards. I´m in a tiny
house with my mother (wrong
spelling, please check it)
There are a
lot of people en the city. My mother (wrong spelling, please
check it) and I went to the restaurant, we ate sushi and for dessert we ate ice crean.
The next day, we´ re walking (This is a PLAN so write ir in the FUTURE) in the city.During the
week (ask me about this) , we 're going to visit a temple , then we
are going to go to see a movie.On Saturday, my mother and I
are going back. my mom already bought tickets . I really had fun
these holidays (wrong spelling, pelase check it) with my
mom . This holidays in Tokyo with her were great. (ask me about this
phrase please)
Much better version Lorenzo. Well done!
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